Tuesday, 1 February 2011



new script

The Deep

written by

Andrew Kinnear

draft 05

1.EXT. Pontoon

low angle push track and slow pan along the pontoon as the child runs into frame from the left and sits on the edge. The kid proceeds to open the newspaper he is holding.

2.EXT. Pontoon

cut underneath the pontoon looking up at the kids legs dangling over the edge and swinging as he reads. His legs bolt suddenly.

3.EXT. Pontoon

close up shot of the kids smiling face. Out of focus submarine behind the kid.

4.EXT. Pontoon

Kids POV shot of the newspaper as he reads it, the kid has won the photography competition and is reading his story. Transition through wavy text as the kid swims through frame on z axis. Swimming towards the iceberg.

5.EXT. Ocean

Kid is infront of the entrance to the ice cave hollowed into the ice berg. The kid is dwarfed by the scale of the ice.

The ice berg dominates the left of frame whilst the kid is centre and slightly to the right.

6.EXT. Ocean

Close up of the kid looking up at the huge block of ice. He then proceeds, without breaking line of sight, to raise his camera and take a picture.

7.EXT. Ocean

cut back to shot 5 as we see the kid proceed to swim at a moderate pace into the ice berg.

8.INT. Ice cave

The Kid is swimming into the ice cave in a large corridor of ice, swims from left to right in a leisurely fashion taking in his environment. Light to dark.

9.INT. Ice cave

The kid comes to a bright section at the end of the cave so he investigates, as he reaches the end of the corridor he is confronted with a cavern made of ice that is housing a sleeping giant eel. Cam moves with the kid as he swims then breaks and pans around to reveal the cavern as the kid sees it.

10.INT. Ice cave

kid is fearful at first but then holds his camera tighter and smiles to himself. Camera in front of the kid he is framed by the rocks dominant on the right of frame.

11.INT. Ice cave

kid swims down to the eel who is sleeping peacefully. Eel on right side kid on the left.

12.INT. Ice cave

kid comes to a stop and cautiously raises his camera. He takes his shot and there is a large flash.

13.INT. Ice cave

close up of the eels eye opening wildly as the flash dissipates.

Pupil dilates.

14.INT. Ice cave

close up of the kid aghast at the wakening of this mighty beast. Terror.

15.INT. Ice Cave

kid swims in a flurry of waving arms and kicking legs up to the direction of the exit.

16.INT. Ice Cave

camera looks back at the kid from the exit as he struggles to swim away, we can see the eel rearing up and then swimming down on the kid. The kid swims out of the way just in time.

17.INT. Ice Cave

the kid continues to swim around the cave looking for an exit but the eel Is gaining on him fast. The swims lower in to the rocks around the floor of the cave.

18.INT. Ice Cave

pov from the kid as he is swimming he notices a rock archway that is narrow enough for him but not the eel.

19.INT. Ice Cave

kid bolts towards the archway and swims through the eel lunges at him but gets stuck in the middle.

20.INT. Ice Cave

wide angle of the kid swimming away with an air of relief as the eel flails wildly trying to free herself.

21.INT. Ice Cave

the kid is approaching the exit when the shrill wailing of the eel cuts through him. He turns back to witness what he has done and sighs in disgust.

22.INT. Ice Cave

the kid returns to the eel and looks her in the eye the thrashing and wailing stops all is calm.

23.INT. Ice Cave

the kid investigates the rocks holding the eel in place

24.INT. Ice Cave

kid struggles with the key stone that is holding the arch in place. With a final push the stone is dislodged

and the eel is free.

25.INT. Ice Cave

the eel swims free and turns straight to the kid and the come face to face. Kid left eel right.

26.INT. Ice Cave

a moment is shared between the two characters where the kid reaches forward to touch the eels head. A moment before the kid is to touch there is a ground shaking roar which scatters dust and debris the kid looks around fear in his eyes again.

27.INT. Ice Cave

the eel also looks shocked but edges slowly towards the kid and nudges him with her head, gesturing for the kid to climb on.

28.INT. Ice Cave

the kid turns not understanding at first fear still etched on his face. The eel nudges one more time and lowers her head, as if bowing. The kid realises and begins to climb on top. As soon as he is on the eel shoots off. The camera pans to see them heading towards the exit.

29.INT. Ice Cave

looking back at the kid riding the eel he struggles to get a grip rodeo style. He finds his hold and sighs then looks determined towards the front.

30.INT. Ice Cave

when the kid finds his grip the eel smiles and pushes onward.

31.INT. Ice Cave

Wide angle shot that echoes the kids entrance to the caves the eel and the kid are swimming straight out of the cave and into the the open right to left of frame. Camera tracks to follow them out as they burst from the caves entrance.

32.EXT. Ocean

looking back at the ice berg we witness a huge tentacle reach up out of the deep and with a loud slap hits the side of the ice berg.

33.EXT. Ocean

the kid turns back to see what it was and is horrified by the sight of so he turns to the eel and taps on its back/head.

34.EXT. Ocean

the eel looks back so slightly then looks more determined and focussed towards escape.

35.EXT. Ocean

long wide angle shot showing the eel and kid on the right swimming for their lives diagonal, upwards. The kraken can now be seen encroaching on the bottom left of frame.

The Kraken brings its tentacles half way forwards and propels itself through the water. It then brings its tentacles up and around the eel and the kid to encase them in a ball of flesh.

36.INT. Tentacles

horror from both the kid and the eel as they are being pushed towards the krakens beak.

37.INT. Tentacles

ots looking into the beak of the kraken struggling kid and eel.

38.INT. Tentacles

wide shot with the kid and eel on the left being pushed in by tentacles the krakens head on the left beak open wide.

Then all of a sudden a camera flash goes off amidst the struggle.

39.INT. Tentacles

the kraken falters and the tentacles stop pushing and relax.

40.INT. Tentacles

the kid looks down to locate his camera then looks baffled as the connection is made, the kid then proceeds to repeatedly flash the camera.

41.EXT. Ocean

close up of the krakens reeling and screaming from the blinding flash

42.EXT. Ocean

wide angle eel and kid turn and flea out of frame as the kraken wiggles around writhing when it comes around the kid and eel are gone. It lets out another roar but this time it is weaker and one of defeat.

43.EXT. Ocean

looking back from the direction of the eel and kid we see the kraken turn and disappear into the deep.

44.Ext. Ocean

the kid turns back and looks back towards the eel and smiles then pats her on the head affectionately. Fade to black.

45.EXT. Ocean

the eel delivers the kid back to his submarine. Dismounts on the top of his submarine.

46.EXT. Ocean

the eel is looking away from the kid back to the deep, she turns to the kid and nods.

47.EXT. Ocean

the kid standing tall on top of his submarine nods his appreciation and success then slides down inside his submarine.

48.INT. Submarine

pov of the kid watching the eel, his friend swim back into the darkness.

49.INT. Submarine

the kid sits in his chair then slumps forwards and reaches for his camera on the table.

50.INT. Submarine

close up of the kid removing the base of the camera so he can remove his photos.

51.INT. Submarine

the credits roll over the top of the kid re living his story through the sequence of photographs laid out on the table.

52.INT. Submarine

The last photo fades to the one in the newspaper that the kid is reading on his pontoon, the kid looks out over the ocean smiling but seemingly deep in thought … cut to black.

first week back

so first week back and i approach the team to make sure they know whats going on and a little check on peoples progress.

the story has now been, in my opinion nailed and i do not wish to waste more time going over the same aspects.

the kraken- fahren has point blank refused to work on this character due to his phobia of octopi and all things akin, so after lengthy discussions i decided to pass the kid over to him to model whilst i try and tame the kraken. im not too happy over this situation as my abilities as a modeller are not that great so to try and take on the kraken is gunna be a huge challenge. but on the plus side at least the kid is in safe hands with fahran.

everything else is slotting together nicely.

i had begun work on modelling the kid and this is the progress I had made when i handed it over to fahran i gave him the choice of using what i had already produced or starting from scratch.

where are we now and where are we headed

currently i have completed the script and storyboard the main character has been designed and i am modelling him at present. the exterior of the iceberg has been modelled and textured by carlos we have an array of lighting examples for the film put forward by keith. the kids submarine has been modelled and textured although i wish to tweak it slightly. we have some great examples of animation from mel to show the movement of the character. the eel has been modelled and textured by fahran and looks great, with clym working on the rig for it again it looks great.
ben has been doing a great job of scheduling and did a great presentation. that was last term .

this term i wish to begin production as soon as we are able. with dissertations looming this will be a very hard target but i believe we must begin production as soon as possible just to get the team rolling. so i am currently nearly finished with a rough animatic which i will pass to emma to fill in with some more detail to help out with the animation and timing. with my rough animatic i wish to complete a rough sound pass to pass to the sound guy Dave so we can get the sound effects going as well.

-pontoon needs to be built with a matte painting aswell.
-interior of ice berg needs building and texturing.
-baby eel needs finalising and building/ rigging
-kraken needs building texturing and rigging


i began to draw the storyboard digitally but was finding myself bored and easily distracted so after watching something about how pixar works i decided to draw the storyboard with pencil and paper the old fashioned way. by doing this i was able to increase my production time considerably and as a result the new story board took no time at all. and at current the storyboard is stuck up on my bedroom wall, i have learnt that this is how i prefer to work and if i am unable to work in this way at college then i shall have to set up base camp in my room.

the new board is the up to date and concise story featuring the new beginning i spoke about in the previous post.

slight revision

after speaking to dan in college before christmas of the new story he suggested beginning the film with the ending to cut out a lot of work on the intro. at first i was worried that this would confuse the audience and i was also unsure about losing the beginning that i had crafted. after some consideration and lack of an idea to finish the film i went back and considered dans technique.

it works.
now the character begins the film having already won the photography competition and we re-live the story through the kids eyes.

- the kid runs onto the pontoon excited clutching a newspaper he sits down at the edge of the pontoon and begins to read amazed at what he sees.
- a 2 page spread devoted to him. a huge picture of him holding a trophy on the one page with a descriptive text and the winning photo on the other.
- the text fades in transition to the kid swimming in the ocean approaching the massive ice berg.

i believe that this beginning benefits the film greatly as it shows the audience how the story will play out and then we begin to piece together the epic tale of how he got his photo.

the Kraken

so here is my initial development work for the kraken.
the mood board shows the general feel and attitude for the character whilst also linking it to real sea creatures big and small. when I personally design characters i think of the outlandish first but then try and contextualize that character in our own world so it does not seem too far fetched for the audience and thus with an animated film i can hopefully imbue the characters with some believability and reality.

with the silhouettes of the kraken i wanted to have something slightly different from the norm whilst also remembering fahrans fear of squiddy tentacle creatures. i have personally decided upon my final design for the character and im now working towards a dramatic concept to show the character in action my next step will be producing the model sheet for it. i am extremely happy with the design and fell that it fits not only the film but the world i have created.

Wednesday, 22 December 2010


1.EXT. Pontoon

low angle push track and slow pan along the pontoon and up to child sitting on a crate.
The child has his back to us as he looks out over the water he Is lazily fishing whilst eating an apple and reading a newspaper. Shot begins with kid on left and ends with kid on right side of frame.

2.EXT. Pontoon

Cut to the front of character he dominates the right side of frame as he takes a bite out of his apple, more interested in his apple and newspaper than the fishing rod.
Behind the kid we see an out of focus sail from his submarine.

3.EXT. Pontoon

POV of Kid-
Close shot of the newspaper the kid is reading left side shows an article warning of a terrible monster that lurks in the Deep, the monster attacks without warning and will kill you. There is no hope and it must be killed.
The kid is suddenly attracted to the opposite page which is a full page advert for a photography competition.
1st prize – brand new camera and job as the papers photographer
2nd prize – money
3rd prize – crappy toy

4.EXT. Pontoon

close shot of the kids “wow” reaction to the competition

5.EXT. Water

Intercut the wow reaction with a close up of the kids fishing line. He has a bite but is more interested in the newspaper, so he ignores.

6.EXT. Pontoon

kid is already walking away from his perch, he has barely reeled in his rod and discards his apple over his shoulder and into the water.
The kid proceeds from right to left and out of frame towards his submarine.

7.EXT. Water

low angle shot looking back at pontoon as the kid throws his apple in the air it lands right in front of the camera then floats past camera follows as we turn 180 degrees the weather and sky change sounds change and we now look at an ice berg afloat in the ocean.
The apple is promptly pulled down into the water fade to titles.

8.EXT. Ocean

flash of white over titles fade into pov of a stunned fish.
The fish has just been photographed by the kid and his view is disorientated.
We can see the kid in his diving gear holding a camera as he swims off.

9.EXT. Ocean

stunned fish floats limply in the water then pops back to its normal swimming position as normal. (fish are dumb)

10.EXT. Ocean

kid swims in a barrel roll as a school of fish swim above him in an arc. As he is on his back he takes a photo and the fish scatter.

11.EXT. Ocean

OTS Kid right side dominant.

After his roll the kid now sees an iceberg, the underwater half, and swims towards it transfixed.

12.EXT. Ocean

wide angle of kid at the cave entrance, he is dwarfed by its enormity.

13.EXT. Ocean

close shot of the kids face as he looks up at the giant entrance.
Fog on inside of his helmet.

14.EXT. Ocean

back to 12 wide angle shot the kid musters his courage and enters the ice cave.

15.INT. Ice Cave

wide angle of the interior of the ice cave, greens and blues as the light refracts and diffuses through the ice. The kid swims from left to right diagonally down.

16.INT. Ice Cave

kid swims diagonally on Z axis away from the camera and towards a pale white glowing chamber in the cave.

17.INT. Ice Cave

camera track and pan around the chamber entrance, at the speed of the kid, to reveal a giant sleeping conger eel. The glow is emanating from the eel itself.

18.INT. Ice Cave

close up of the kids face in aww at the sight of the sleeping beast.

19.INT. Ice Cave

kid swims diagonally down toward bottom right of frame approaching on the z axis toward the camera. Fade to 20.

20.INT. Ice Cave

kid is now an arms length from the eel's head he reaches for his camera and slowly takes a photograph. Large white flash.

21.INT. Ice Cave

close shot of the Eel's eye as it snaps open and the pupil dilates from the flash. The eel's markings change from white to orange.

22.INT. Ice Cave

Close shot of the kid as he realises he is in danger.

23.INT. Ice Cave

the kid franticly swims backwards as the eel begins to rear.
Pure terror on the kids face as he turns.

24.INT. Ice Cave

Long shot
kid swims up from right to left towards camera.
Eel swoops in a great arc from its sleeping place up round and near to the kid the kid dodges at the last minute as the eel continues her momentum.

25.INT. Ice Cave

Kid swims to a stop and surveys his surroundings.

26.INT. Ice Cave

POV of Kid looking around.
Kid looks left to right at his environment then to the eel looming in the higher parts of the cavern. He spots a crack on the other side of the chamber and swims for it.

27.INT. Ice Cave

close up showing kids determination.

28.INT. Ice Cave

kid swims into the crack just in time the eel charges down and misses the kid by a fraction. The eel's momentum causes her to slam into the cave floor. Stunning her.

29.INT. Ice Cave

low angle shot looking at the cave ceiling as three stalactite/icicles break from the roof due to the commotion.

30.INT. Ice Cave

Icicle impales the Eel's flipper pinning it to the cave floor.
The Eel tries to get free but cant

31.INT. Ice Cave

kid seizes his opportunity and fleas the scene.

32.INT. Ice Cave

kid swimming up towards camera then we hear a small cry. Child like.
The kid stops and turns to witness a baby eel trying to free its mother but it is impossible. At the sight of this the kid turns to help.

33.INT. Ice Cave

the kid swims back down from left to right and past the Eels head.

34.INT. Ice Cave

kid struggles to lift the icicle, struggles … and then it dislodges.

35.INT. Ice Cave

close shot of the Eel as she lets out a small cry.

36.INT. Ice Cave

shot of the icicle falling the ground showing the freed eel.

37.INT. Ice Cave

Kid is now face to face with the mother eel. He raises his hand to touch her face.
An Almighty ROAR that shakes the cavern.

The kid turns to see what it is fear etched on his face. The mother eel calls to her child to hide.

38.INT. Ice Cave

The Eel gestures to the kid to get on its head.
The kid does so slowly and cautiously.
As soon as the kid is on top the Eel blasts off.

39.INT. Ice Cave

kid slides down the eel to where the sail fin begins he holds on and enjoys the ride.

40.INT. Ice Cave

wide angle shot
the eel blasts through the cave and out into the ocean speed is of the essence.

41.EXT. Ocean

a huge tentacle slaps the side of the iceberg.

42.EXT. Ocean

the kid turns back at the sound of the tentacle. Fear changes to determination.

43.EXT. Ocean

the kid turns and reaches for his camera

44.EXT. Ocean

black space in the watery void #flash# of the camera illuminates a hulking kraken. Which turns at the sight of the light.

45.EXT. Ocean

the eel delivers the kid back to his submarine. Dismounts on the top of his submarine.

46.EXT. Ocean

the eel is looking away from the kid back to the deep, she turns to the kid and nods.

47.EXT. Ocean
the kid standing tall on top of his submarine nods his appreciation and success then slides down inside his submarine.

48.EXT. Pontoon

the kid runs up and opens the paper he is beaming and the audience is able to see the proof of his win through the front page which displays the kid winning a trophy and then next to it the winning photo, that of the kraken.

is it "Kraken" or "Kroken"?

so the new character the KRAKEN. he is there as the "Bigger fish" lighting on the fact that there is always some thing bigger. the kraken will be the heightened threat level for the film and will push the eel and kid together. the eel wanting to save the kid due to her maternal instincts and also due to the fact that he had just helped save her.

initial sketch work